Second pic, yay.

News: Don't expect an update to either of these stories for a bit, this week is hell and I have a lot of outside life monotony to attend to. Namely two comparative art essays, an English essay, an accounting project, and also accounting homework. Basically...a shitstorm of work.

I'll be working on SaP Ch 4 slowly and then Ch 3 of SW if possible. I might just splurge on SaP if I can find the time to really just sit and write.

Doesn't help that a bowler hat is the least intimidating hat ever.

>>1065


Yeah it almost had me in hysterics

>>1066
Tell that to Odd-Job. And besides, the salesman is supposed to seem non-threatening. If you laugh and are relaxed, it's easier to con you.

And for the record, I think bowler hats are awesome.

I just realized we got our own section.
Love the Lugia picture, by the way.

I may not be writing for a while as there is something in my life causing a major psychological dilemma that needs to be addressed. I've started feeling threatened just recently, and I'm feeling cornered becuase of the situation and events surrounding the reasons behind why I feel this way.

I am angry, and hurt because of what's been happening lately between me and someone who I felt was a friend. I can't say what is going on as that is a private affair, and name calling has never done anyone any good at all.

Don't expect anything to be done on either of my stories until I can figure out how to get things dealt with, which involves me having a serious talk with the party involved.

>>1083
Problem solved methinks...now back to writing.

>>1088

Yeah, sorry about all that. :S

There are times when I come up with ideas that someone should write. I post them most often on my profile. However no one ever looks at those. So now that I'm on a forum, prepare for me to post these little ideas for you're viewing pleasure as well as the possibility that you may actually take up the challenges I post. So, without further ado, my first writers challenge for all of you on this thread.
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Writers Challenge #1 (4/11/10): was listening to some western movie music, Ennio Morricone specifically. The Musician behind the music of spaghetti westerns that are probably considered classics (Fist full of dollars, Few dollars more, The good The Bad and The Ugly, Once upon a time in the west, and probably more).

This crazy idea popped into my head while listening to it so I figured I'd post a challenge and see if someone would do it for the lulz. It can be a One Shot or a full on Story, but it should be complete non the less.

Make a Pokemon fic, that is also a spaghetti western. Get that sense of grittiness and grunge that is always seen with things of this nature. All the stereotypes; the nameless hero who's a "bad" man but has a heart of gold, all the other good stuff.

The challenge here is not to make a satire, but to seriously write it and bring out both the elements of Pokemon and the spaghetti western. This may not be possible, but the image of a guy, in a big hat, with a poncho, and an unnamed pokemon, walking silently into a western themed town, looked extremely cool in my mind.

He can be paired with a human, or with a pokemon, it doesn't matter. You can even play by rules that in a time period such as that it may be against the law but as its a frontier type environment, no one really enforces it. It's all possible. This challenge is meant as a fun thing for someone to do if they happen to feel up to taking on a silly little side project.
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I won't be doing this as I already have two stories and i want to focus on them. I know all you other writers have projects as well, so this is not a mandatory challenge.

It's here as a post so that if you decide to take it up, you can. There will be more challenges to come as I think of them, most will just be cute and silly ideas like this one. Best of luck to whomever wishes to take this one up for a One Shot or full on story.
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News: Progress is slow, as usual. However, like Ausare before me, here is some stuff to show I have been working and to give you a taste of Chapter 4.

Chapter 4: Rock Solid

He heard his mother ask something, "Hmm? Oh, I just got to the outskirts of Oreburgh...yea...waiting for the bus...," Magnus watched as his "brother" looked to him, "Magnus is fine, he's gotten bigger...yea Hex and Aztec are doing well too...yes she's still a handful...," the boy listened, hefting his pack, and rolled his eyes, "Yes mom I know that the vase Aztec broke will come out of my earnings...yes...don't worry mom I'm sure I'll do fine at the gym...hey, listen, the bus is coming, I need to go, I'll e-mail you soon, love you."

>>1095
Ennio Morricone's work on the Mission to Mars soundtrack is some seriously gorgeous music.

I might have a crack at that, and I like the idea of this community doing challenge fics.

>>1095
This is a good idea. Banditos doing a train robbery on Rapidash.

A silent Trainer, a single Pokeball on his belt, covered by a flowing serape...if I weren't behind on everything I'd love to do this. Westerns are my favorite movies.

>>1095
Just to keep it in the forefront of the outside world when they look at the summary of the thread.

>>1107
Your imagery shows you would know exactly what to do and would probably enthrall us all with a story that is full of nostalgia for the Italian western as well as the elements of Pokemon.

It would be nice to see someone take this on seriously, simply to see if it would work. I can't as I already have everything my mind can handle. If I add another story I'll overload and short circuit.

Silver Wings and Sin and Punishment are all I can handle right now...and even that feels overwhelming to me.

Best of luck to anyone who takes on this challenge.

Well, now the idea is pulsing maddeningly in my mind. Perhaps to avoid my bad habit of getting distracted with the writer's equivalent of ADD, I'll write it all in one rush and put it up as one chapter.

The sun dipped down below the western horizon, taking the light and most of the heat. Night rose over a scorched and ruined hardpan, little more than sand and rock. A few cacti, sickly and yellow from lack of water, shot up out of the ground. Scrub grass sparsely dotted the ground, jutting up from cracks in the hardpan. Sand dunes blocked sightlines in all directions but south. To the north, mountains like mirages rose and scratched the cloudless navy sky.

He sat in front of a low fire, resting against a dune while his Dodrio slept beside him. He took a small pouch from his bright, multicolored serape and removed a small square paper. Into the paper he carefully dropped some tobacco, which he then rolled and licked closed. He lit the cigarillo from the fire and smoked quietly.

The smoke kept his bright blue eyes at a squint and rose to the brim of his flat hat. It rolled over the edge, passing the higher middle and floating off in the desert air. He ran a thumb over the stubble on his cheek and placed the tobacco pouch back in his pocket. The action briefly exposed his clothes to the elements. A faded blue shirt, missing its top two buttons and open at the throat; a pair of rough and worn-in blue jeans, ending where his tough leather boots began; between the shirt and jeans, a belt, fastened through the loops. An empty Pokeball rested on the left side, a revolver in its smooth brown holster on the right.

News: Chapter 4 is moving at a slugs pace, and its really starting to irk me. I'm also not at all happy with how its coming along. My dialog is okay but I'm hating how I'm identifying who is talking. So and so said, "Bla"

"Bla" said so and so.

"bla bla?" asked so and so.

Yea, its repetitive and its driving me up a wall. I know this can be fixed in editing but right now its causing me to move slower becuase I always want to go back and fix everything. I'm currently just trying to get the chapter roughed out.

I'll need someone to edit it with me once its finished. After chapter 4 is out I might go and work on chapter 3 of SW since someone told be they were looking forward to it with great zeal.

That's about it really.

>>1139

Don't forget that in a one-on-one conversation, you can simply drop the "said ____" (once you've established speaker order) to imply rapid back-and-forth conversation.

Steev inquired "did you get a chance to tell her?"
"No... I couldn't work up the courage", Josiah replied.
"Really?"
"Yeah."

>>1142

This. I know this doesn't help much, but get creative. You don't have to directly say who is talking, but you could include actions of the speaker. I'm sure you'll think of something.

>>1144
Gestures help.

>>1227
Female Char* incomming in chapter 4 of SaP :P

Jaaaaabbers.

>>1241
I'm working on it ragdoll, I'm working on it. And btw, thanks for the pic, it warms my heart to see my namesakes bad-ass mug on my thread. Makes me want to repay you by working as fast as I can.

Text formatting test: Humpty Dumpty had a great fall!

This is a line of dialog from chapter 4, I am just testing to see if it comes out correctly. I'm trying to place emphasis on the word "fall" for reasons I won't go into. If this works let me now.

>>1248
It emphasizes fall through lack of emphasizing features.

Un-italicising text in italicised text has the same effect as italicising text in un-italicised text.

>>1260
>>1262
They've got that covered. Same advice from me.

NEWS!!!!: Chapter 4 has been completed, now its just a matter of editing. So release will be soon, hopefully. I plan to outline Ch 3 of Silver Wings once Ch 4 of SaP is up. I feel so proud of myself.

>>1274
DOUBLE POST!!LOL!!: Also, thanks to Espy and Iruni for helping me past several major writers blocks. Espy gets a gold star becuase he's being my editor and ideas man. Thanks guys, I hope that you will continue to help me out, as the quality of this piece gets better with the aid you give. Than you so much.

NEWS: Chapter 4: Rock Solid: http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049220&chapter=4

Link and title is all you need to know. I look forward to everyone's speculations, comments, and criticisms. I will warn you that this chapter is almost 17000 words, so prepare for long reading.

Next on agenda is prepping and writing Chapter 3 of Silver Wings.

I love it. I wasn't sure at first about time-jumping yet again, but this works great. You set up these exarceans to be great villains, by the way. I can't wait to see what happens here!

>>1292
this was the last of the massive time jumps, from now on its only jumps in terms of days or weeks. For instance, the next chapter opens up within Jubilife, which means the time on the road was skipped, but that's because nothing important happened there. I skip time whenever it isn't important. Usually road travel. I don't narrate random trainer battles if I can help it, as that would get boring.

so a couple days to maybe a week if nothing important happens. any developments during said time periods will be covered in the same format the year skips were, memory sequences. I don't think anyone will have problems with this. If they do, I'm sure they'll let me know and also offer a solution. Until then, that's the way of things.

Great chapter, Jabbz. Dante and Aiya seem like cool characters.

To nitpick technically, there was some awkward tense early on, but you either got into the groove or I got caught up in the chapter because I didn't notice it much beyond the first few paragraphs.

>>1294
If you could go back and find them, point them out to me so I can fix them. I would appreciate it.

Actually, looking back I think this is the only line that really made me stumble.

"He had also further established that she was a very gifted individual. Where she had left Canalave reading at a sixth grade level, she now read material that Clause found to be on par with some scholars. She was brainy and smart. She would even invent her own battle strategies on their trip to Oreburgh."

If he's reflecting on the last two years in this section, this paragraph doesn't really make sense. Either he's reflecting on the future, or her strategies happened earlier in the trip and you need to switch the tense.

Sorry if this comes off as nitpicky, I seem to remember you stating somewhere that you wanted just that, but I might be wrong.

>>1298
It's fine, keep nitpicking. How am I supposed to have a well rounded chappy without it? I may never fix my mistakes, but if someone points them out I will. So keep at it :).

>>1298

How's this for a fix?

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He had also further established that she was a very gifted individual. Where she had left Canalave reading at a sixth grade level, she now read material that Clause found to be on par with some scholars. She was brainy and smart. She had often even invented her own battle strategies while they had been traveling to Oreburgh."

If it were me, I'd drop "often". Aside from that, yes. That works fine.

>>1304
Thanks ragdoll, appreciate it.

NEWS: performed a series of edits to Chapter 2 of SW, merely cosmetic, but readers should glance through it anyways just to be up to date. Main change was sex revelation, I'll be using that in the next chapter as the way I did it previously wasn't necessarily believable.

That's all really, now to begin work on Chapter 3.

>>1318
More NEWS: Cursory edits were performed on Chapter's 1 and 4 of SaP. Mostly small word changes, but more importantly time management. I reworked the time taken to travel from a ridiculous amount to something more realistic IMO.

Jubilife -> Oreburgh 2~3 days

As opposed to the 5~7 I had originally. Also changed driving time from 1~2 days to around an hour.

I would appreciate keen eyes to glance through all chapters briefly to look for any indiscrepancies. Let me know if you find anything. Thanks.

Ok, so I finally read chapter two of Silver Wings.


>She was dehydrated, which made him question how long he had been unconscious. He grunted as he stood, his legs aching. He stooped, preparing to lift the moderately sized Pokemon and carry her to the water. He was surprised when he picked her up with little effort, his thoughts racing, 'That's not good.'.


Now you could write this off on ignorance on his part, but being light is a good sign. That's one of the weird things about life and death. When someone is alive, they are much lighter and easier to move about. However, after they die, they become heavier in weight, and are often harder to move about because of this, even after rigermortis has subsided. So Nami being light is a GOOD sign.

>However when some of the fresh water got into his mouth and he swallowed it, he had never thought water could taste so good. He drank greedily as she hosed him down, shaking his head to make sure he was completely soaked. His body felt a lot better afterward, and the breeze brushing along his damp skin made him feel refreshed.


I see him acting like a dog being sprayed with a hose, chasing after the stream of water with his mouth.

>It was roughly five feet from head to tail. Its pristine white skin shone like snow. Its breast and stomach, the small quills that protruded from its back, the tail flukes, and the spikes that surrounded its bright blue eyes, were a dark cobalt blue.

Welcome, love interest!

>He bit into it, and almost gagged, but his hunger soon pushed aside any preference for taste.

Raw fish isn't that bad. I mostly gag on it because I choked on an anchovy one day while young... so now fish bone makes me uneasy... although I guess that's true with most people who don't eat fishbone as a delicacy.


>He heard a sudden ripping sound, and looked over to find the Lugia with a large chunk of the Magikarp in its beak-like jaws, it jerked its head and swallowed it, bending down to tear off more.


It would have been better if she just swallowed it like an egret... whole.

Also, the part about the fire... you've never build a fire from nothing before, have you...? Driftwood and kelp isn't exactly the best material to make a fire from, as both tend to be damp to the core, kelp unbelievably so. In fact, I'd be more inclined to try to eat the kelp if in dire straights than try to even light a fire with it. In fact, most plant material is a bit too wet to try to start easily, the water within the cells preventing it from igniting. On the type of island he's on, you should be able to find plenty of dried out grass of various types. Maybe some shrubs.

Going the route he's taking, he'll be frustrated, tired, hungry, and cold... with no fire.

>...growling softly and ruffling its wings in apprehension.


Birds hiss, flatten feathers and crests, and raise wings ever so slightly, tucking the forearm of the wings into their back. It's kinda like tucking your arms into themselves and pressing them forwards then clucking and chanting chicken. Although, that right there is a chicken fighting taunt itself.

Here is a semi-good example.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CipLUCKinN8&

However, the individual crest movements is unique to this species line as not all birds have it, but they still have similar vocabulary across species lines in other areas. Notice how the crest is upwards at the beginning, denoting curiosity, excitement, intent and interest. Then as the hand moves in, the bird lowers its head and crest, sticking wings out ever so slightly (this one didn't do it as much as usual as it's not trying to actually start a fight) and makes its presence ever so smaller. This individual bird is simply saying, "fuck off!"

>>1339
god damn, finally! about time someone other than Iruni or Nona said something! Iruni and Espy have an excuse, but no one else does. Why is it my request for comments and such has gone ignored? I know Equilibrium is cool and all, but come on people, I'm looking to improve my skill here. Can't do that without feedback.

I would get a pro author/critic to help me...but fanfics are usually a waste of their time. Sure I try to get inspired from them, maybe even vaguely ask their advice on a certain interaction, but I wouldn't have them read this stuff.

I need to know what people think, and what I might want to change. All so I can learn and grow. I'm writing both these stories for my enjoyment sure, I want to tell them. However I'm also using them as a playground to get better at writing and story telling so I can better my original works.

Come on people, help a fellow out.

Just so readers stay up to date, I may be taking on a really slow update schedule, slower than the one I've been pulling for 4 chapters. Life has taken its toll on me, and thus i have less time to write than before. Add into that any writers blocks and it'll be a miracle if people even remember these stories when I update them. Needles to say, I will be working on both in whatever free time I may have. Silver Wings Ch 3 is moving along nicely, and once its released I will begin work on chapter 5 of SaP.

Hope this helps you readers out there to understand that I'm not, not writing out of laziness, but out of necessity to get my life in order. Thanks for whatever comments you have given. I appreciate them. Hopefully the silence I endure won't last forever. I do hope to see more thoughts on my work popping up in this thread. I'll continue writing regardless.

Silver Wings: Chapter 3: Lessons
http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049482&chapter=3

Read, review, comment, criticize, all that good stuff. Now, to decide whether I should start SaP ch 5 or SW Ch 4 next. Unsure, so outside opinion would be appreciated here. Until then, I'll be taking a bit of a breather mayhaps...ah who am I kidding, I think I'll start working on SW 4. The plot needs to pick up the pace.

God DAMMIT why do people only upload when I have a ton of homework that shouldn't be procrastinated ;-;

I like this. It's rather cute. Especially the concept of a Lugia sniffing around like some kind of bloodhound.

He should totally start his training career with a Vaporeon and a Lugia.

Chapter 4 of SW is moving along after 2 weeks of stagnant nothingness. If I can keep moving with it, I expect it to be done within the area of next week.

Props to Iruni and Espy for being my support through my lazy and procrastinating times. I can be a severe pain in that department. However the engine has started again, so hopefully it won't stop until Ch 4 is done.

Thanks guys, you're a big help.

Excellent news!

Could someone give me a list of regions or nations that are in pokemon official cannon? I would like options for future plot points in SaP. Name, and summary would be appreciated.

Kanto Region: Found in games: R,G,B,Y,G,S,C,FR,LG,HG,SS. Gym Types: Rock, Water, Electric, Grass, Psychic, Poison, Fire, Ground. Evil Team: Rocket. League location: Indigo Plateau.

Johto Region: Found in games: G,S,C,HG,SS. Gym Types: Flying, Bug, Normal, Ghost, Fighting, Steel, Ice, Dragon. Evil Team: Rocket. League location: Indigo Plateau.

Hoenn Region: Found in games: R,S,E. Gym Types: Rock, Fighting, Electric, Fire, Normal, Flying, Psychic, Water. Evil Team: Magma, Aqua. League location: Evergrand City.

Sevii Islands: Found in games: FR,LG,E(To some extent. only event islands for Mew and Deoxys.) Gym Types: none. Evil Team: Rocket. League location: none.

Sinnoh Region: Found in games: D,P,PT. Gym Types: Rock, Grass, Ghost, Fighting, Water, Steel, Ice, Electric. Evil Team: Galactic. League location: Pokemon League (unnamed island).

Isshu Region: Found in games: B,W. Gym Types: unknown. Evil Team: unknown. League location: unknown.

Orre Region: Found in games: COL,XD. Gym Types: None. Evil Team: Snagem, Cipher. League location: none.

Fiore Region: Found in games: Ranger. Gym Types: None. Evil Team: Go-Rock Squad. League location: none.

Almia Region: Found in games: Ranger SoA. Gym Types: none. Evil Team: Dim Sun. League location: none.

Oblivia Region: Found in games: Ranger 3(no english title as of yet.) Gym Types: none. Evil Team: Pokemon Nappers. League location: none.

Holon Region: Found only in the TCG. Gym Types: unknown. Evil Team: unknown. League location: unknown. The Holon region is only found in the Holon expansion of the TCG. In it, are included Pokemon that are of types that differ from their natural typing (Gardevoir is Psychic/Steel or Fire) dubbed Delta Species. The Delta Species pokemon retain their natural weaknesses and resistances, however.

Unknown Locations: Sinjoh Ruins.

=_=....progress = slow...all this time for only a short SW chapter...WTF is wrong with me...patience people...patience...I just need to beat myself over the head...get really moving.

Does anyone know of a good cure for having way to many distractions? I can't seem to get up enough gumption to turn off my web browser or my chat programs OR my Wii OOOOORRR my DS...do in short I haven't been writing at all...Iruni's been a soldier and constantly trying to push me when he probably should just ditch me...and I'm pissed a bit at myself for turning into something akin to Slash Fakerstorm. Meaning I've turned into someone who updates once in a solar eclipse...or less. Turning off the distractions only works for so long, cause I'll find myself turning them back on through habit. In short...I need some form of boost. Something to keep me writing so I can get back into the game. It's not like I'm doing anything important. I want to finish SW 4 before I start taking Drivers Ed classes n the 5th of July.

Write word/openoffice/notepad/whatever you use into your startup programs. Remove MSN/Skype/AIM/Yahoo/IRC from startup.

Take the shortcut to your web browser off of your desktop and out of your quicklaunch.

Works for me when I'm supposed to get shit done.

At least you update.

WTF Monster Hunter Tri! Seriously...and today my parental units want me to clean house...and its July now...I need to get driving somehow but the school I thought I was registered for...doesn't seem to be interested in talking to me any more...so now to find another one. So in short.

ISSUES: job, driving, school, games, family, house, chats, certain people, and myself.

Yeah.

Okay, birthday madness took hold over the past couple of days, so no writing has been done for those days. Thanks to Iruni, the next chapter of SW is nearing completion at a faster pace than I was writing it before. I expect it to be done somewhere around Monday or Tuesday as there is still some stuff to do over the weekend not revolving around my writing.

I'm probably going to get stomped by a bunch of you guys for taking so long with the usual short SW chapter, but a lot of shit happened that I have to take the blame for anyway.

On a side note I have some good and bad news. Good news, I'm now "sort of" writing again and SW is going to have its next chapter out soon...hopefully. Bad news...I'm most likely going to shelve my SW project for awhile so as to get reacquainted with SaP. I want to push SaP up to the point where I had left of before starting my reconstruction/rewrite. Don't worry, SW will be finished, I just want to focus on my original brainchild and get it moving again.

That's about it really. I hope this update pleases some of you out there. Be ready to R+R SW when its updated.

Well I lied about getting it out by monday~teusday but chapter 3 of SW is finally finished, however readers will have to wait for a bit as Iruni is working on going through my draft. So once its corrected and all that good stuff, I'm sure everything will be set for it to post. Not sure when the editing process will be over, but you'll know when there's a nice message here saying "look at what I did!" lol.

Until then, have fun doing whatever you guys and gals do.

>>1577
Oops, I meant chapter 4.

Holy crap I'm alive! And I have something for all of you...finally...Come one come all and read chapter 4 of Silver Wings: Goodbye, for now...

R+R, and enjoy. Now I get to tank on SaP 5...WHOOOO!!

link: http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049482&chapter=4

>>1608
also...thanks to Iruni...A LOT...because he had the strength and fortitude to continue pestering me to write and pushing editing alongside me. He's a great friend, and I really really REALLY want him to be recognized for helping me. So go read Dark Type, and Unexpected Conflagration. Give him many props, and all that jazz. But besides that, do enjoy this tiny morsel of around 7K words or more. THANKS IRUNI!!! And thanks readers for being patient in the extreme. Catch you all later.

>>1608
>>1610
Always glad to help out.

Go read this /canalave/! It's a great chapter. Discuss it too! We're the 5th most active board this week, we're coming out of our slump!

Digletts unrelated.

Awh man, I feel for him. If he'd had some pokeballs with him, he could've caught the Lugia, beaten the poachers AND the monk and sailed into the sunset~

I kid, I kid. Looking forward to the next - be it this or SaP.

>>1635
Thanks ragdoll for the swell comments. As of now though I'm struggling with trying to lay out SaP 5. I have a lot of weaknesses that I want help with getting past plot and development wise. There are some things me and Iruni are discussing but I still lack certain means to write what I want to. I'll give a small spoiler and say that my problems are revolving around creating adequate filler and character development to expand and rebuild on what I had before. Dante, and Hex are all elements and wild cards that now mean my story can take drastically different paths through its plot than it did previously. I'm feeling a bit overwhelmed and a bit freaked out with the daunting prospect of dealing with it.

Another problem is that I prefer to work with someone while outlining so that I can be kept on the straight and narrow. However relying on others is a bad thing...right? I don't think it is but hey.

The upside is that having partners is what made the reconstruction/rewrite I'm doing the better work that it is now.

So yeah, it'll be a bit before things are straightened out enough to actually start writing. As reassurance, I'm fired up about the prospect of SaP 5 so distractions will hopefully be easily avoided.

Wish me luck, I'll need it.

I've fallen into my old sentence by sentence style that comes with a bad thought process, but at least I'm working again. This rebuild is going to be annoying because I'm so used to what I did already. Often times I wonder if I'm crazy for starting this.

As it is, I'm worried for SaP. More people seem to like SW, but SaP was my starting piece. If I could get some kind of feedback as to what is drawing more people to one over the other, maybe I could improve on what I'm doing.

As it is I'm shadowed by Equilibrium and Ragnarok. Iruni's got his own group of followers. Not saying I need them, I would just like to know if there's something wrong that I could fix.

>>1664

I enjoy SaP quite thoroughly. I would suggest, though, that you develop whichever one is giving you the most joy to write. You shouldn't be writing to or for a userbase.

>>1665
That's true, I keep forgetting that.

>>1666
Damn it firefox! Why can't you make my life easier and just remember to input my name. Arg!

So I figured an update was in order since I'll be gone fore a week starting today (not that anyone will notice considering the fact that I never really update to begin with). I figure, like Iruni, I can try my hand at weekly updates of some sort...or just updates in general when I feel like it.

Today's update brings you: a status report.
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Sin and Punishment: Chapter 5 has started and has reached its 3~4th page (ZOMG! I'm actually working) and still going. Progress is slower than I would like, but at least its progress. Better than being distracted by innumerable amounts of things on a constant basis.

Silver Wings: On hold until I feel the urge to add another chapter, mainly because I've missed SaP so much that I want to spend some quality time with it. HOWEVER...I do have a chapter title for you. As of now, Chapter 5 will be dubbed Childhood's End, so feast on the possibilities of that while I grind away Ch5 of SaP.
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Iruni should get more praise, because he's continuing to help me brainstorm and get past humps, and in general just be an awesome friend. So credit where credit is due. As usual thanks to those that did read, and hope you stay involved. Catch you all later.

I have returned and have good news, I just saved a bunch of money on my car insurance by switching to Geico...No wait...what?

Actually I have made progress, approximately...one scene's worth of material is completed and as some of you are aware, SaP's scenes can go on for awhile.

with the urge to write reawakened, a lot of things are going to take second place...even though I now have access to internet once again. Trust me when I say it was the most progression I ever made in a long time.

So, with that, I shall return to the writers forge and hopefully continued the spree I started during my week long absence (Not that anyone noticed). Back at it I go, catch you later.

Almost forgot the weekly update for this week. So hence, status report!

Silver Wings: Still on hold because... yeah no need to go into that.

Sin and Punishment: The 5th chapter got done in record time, and is in Beta phase right now in the hands of the all powerful Iruni. My guesstimate is that It'll be posted some time today or tomorrow.

Also, Skyler, I don't know if you read SaP any more, but when I said I was rebuilding everything I meant EVERYTHING. You might take an interest in what happens in this chapter since you knew the original before I pulled it.

Other than that, keep an eye out for updates and such. Catch you later.

>>1713
On hold?! But I like Silver Wings! :(


...not that I don't like SaP.

>>1713
I'm not 'all powerful', I just help people.

And heads up people, chapter inbound.

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049220&chapter=5

New Chapter for those interested. Picture is relevant (sorta-kinda).

R+R, and such. Title: New Directions. Chapter 6 will begin constructing as soon as I brainstorm a bit. Catch you all later.

You know what I think of the chapter already, as I've helped in more ways than I probably should've, but you'll probably just tell me to take my credit and deal with it.

Anywho, if you want a formal review, this'll probably be less than satisfactory, in terms of new opinions.

Overall, one of the more pleasant to read chapters in a long time, perhaps because of the less-than-usual length, but I know you prefer long chapters anyway (and this was in fact supposed to include the material from your previous 5, but now split to save from epic length).

Dante never ceases to amuse me with his overall bluntness, that'll likely cause more trouble than he's worth at some point. Good thing he and Aiya are more than capable at handling themselves.

As I said in my first review, I like Hex. And now that this new development has arisen, I'm all the more pleased.

Looking forward to what you'll include in your next chapter, and as always, I'm glad I could help out in any way.

Well I can say I really really REALLY enjoyed this chapter. The wholehex thing kinda took me by surprise but I am still pleased with how it looks like it's gonna turn out. Dante is as awesome as ever, and so is clauses mum.

It was an enjoyable read and as usual, you played the brotherly relationship between Magnus and Claude very well. If I do have any complaints, then the fact that I would have preferred the chapter to be longer, but I'm not one to talk, seeing as I haven't updated TMH in like 5 years.

On a related note, I WILL be updating, and soon too. Perhaps I should starty own thread?

>>1723
Urgj. Blame spelling errors / wrong words on the iPhones predictive bullshit text thing.

>>1723
Hot damn I have a comment, this is the best day ever. Thanks Skrewd my man, and yes, please make a thread here. That way I can read it and stuffs. You wanted it to be longer? You're one of the few people that says that. Mostly people want my chapters more handle-able. If memory serves me correctly this latest Chapter is around 20~21 pages. You must have rocketed through it.

Glad you liked it. Keep eyes open for Chapter 6. Depending on scheduling it could be out just as quickly as 5. Catch you later Skrewd.

Mmm, good chapter. You frequently set up plot points which I expect not to work, and then make them work anyway.

Cool main pairing, also. Though I'd prefer being in Dante's position to Clause's.

>>1730
Umm...what? Care to be a bit more specific ragdoll? And why would you rather be in Dante's shoes anyway? You like Charmeleons?

Thanks for the comments though. I appreciate them ^_^.

>>1736

It's a bit hard to explain. Like, when the narrative started hinting that Big Things regarding the main pairing were going to happen in short order, I couldn't imagine how you'd introduce that at this juncture in a natural and believable manner. But then you did.

Don't read into it too much, it's neither a criticism nor a compliment, and not something you need to change. Just musing.

And hell yeah I like me some Charmeleon :'D

>>1737
Heh, glad you like Dante. I'm proud of his success with readers that comment (Now in an easily manageable list: ragdoll, Iruni, Espy, Skrewd, and occasionally... Psyence.)

And I appreciate the comments, and now I understand sort of what you mean by Big Things. Though more clarification might be needed because I'm dumb like that. But its nice to know I have a style that works.

Iruni helps a lot when I get stuck, and well... let's just say there are more surprises down the road that might knock you for a loop.

As for anything involving Dante, I can't say as his presence has shifted several events due to his status as a companion character. Several moments where Cluase had to deal with things alone original, they've been changed. It's a great experience let me tell you.

That's about it really, so I'll catch you later.

Only occasionally? I can submit my reviews in email form if you're concerned about stuff. Plus that allows for easy replies.

Just now getting around to reading the latest chapter.

Hot DAMN this bit with Hex is one of the most well written...Just...wow. Jabbz, you. are. awesome.

This entire chapter is just...exceptional. It's just so...good. I really enjoyed reading it.

>>1751
What I meant by that was that I haven't heard from you in awhile.

>>1757
thanks for the comments man, appreciate them.

CHALLENGE!!!

I need a logo for the Heaven's Gate Corporation. Unfortunately while I can draw characters and ships and other sundry things, I can't make decals or simple logos. It's always been beyond my grasp to think that simplistically.

So anyone interested, draw a logo for the Corporation and post it here with a description in text of what it looks like that can be used in story form.

Guidelines: Has to have the letters H and G in it. Or the full name 'Heavens Gate'. That's about it. Should be something you'll see on things like laptops and such, iconic and recognizable.

I'll make up something as a place holder for now so I can continue writing. Catch you later.

Very simple, but get's the job done. How's this strike ya?

oops, left the font grouped.

LETS TRY THAT AGAIN

Oh wow, its Tuesday already (1:42AM) and I JUST realized I forgot to give a weekly update on saturday. So here's the delayed one... yay.

Chapter 5 is... halted for the moment (at one paragraph no less) because I've had some editing things to do with an old associate of mine. Other than that... I have plans and I shall put them in motion... hopefully before Halo Reach comes out.

Unfortunately there is the issue that I will have a job I need to practice for come next saturday. It's a one day thing but its getting me money I need. So writting will be one of the things I need to do, and other things will take a cut.

Other than that, well... yeah. I won't be jumping on the preview band wagon unless I find it necessary. That's about it. Catch you all later.

So yes, the picture IS relevant. Late last night, like the idiot I am who never listens to his parents warnings because I'm always SO FUCKING CAREFUL, I knocked my laptop off the arm of the chair I was sitting on.

Good News? The hard drive and stuff still works and the computer operates just fine. Bad News? I can't see a fucking thing on the screen except in a very small portion of the upper left quarter of it.

This means what? Well it means that I won't be getting writing or ANYTHING else done until I get the LCD fixed/replaced (Which is possible but with my family's budget isn't likely any time in the near future).

So this also means the only way anyone who knows me will be able to get in touch with me is through e-mail. As all my chat's including IRC were on that machine.

I feel incredibly guilty/angry/horrified. I'm quite upset in other words. Can't wait to see what my parents think (oh joy). So until this problem is fixed... no writing (it's not that I don't have back ups. It's that the back ups are out dayed and it would mean trying to remember things I wrote (my fault again). Also every other computer is my Dad's or Mom's so using the to write this kind of thing (though they know about it) isn't exactly a good idea.

So I'm doing this damn update while people are away. And suffering inside due to how I was going to write today. But hey, this was bound to happen at some point. Lady Luck always saves her worst for me when I least expect it. Still my fault but it just felt so random.

That's it for now, I'll catch you all later.

>>1775
dayed = dated.

>>1775
And also "using the to write" = "using them." Damn typos.

>>1775

Oh god, I'm so sorry! I had that happen to my iBook years ago, and the warranty had just expired.

You did get the warranty on your MacBook, right?

Lesson learned, I guess. Hope it doesn't cost too much to repair :C

>>1778
I do, but that warranty doesn't cover self inflicted things...such as dropping the computer and shattering the LCD. It does protect the hard-drive though so, say the computer was freezing, or had a virus, or something else like that. THEN the warranty would cover it. So what I've found out from some forums is that replacing the LCD will cost somewhere in the range of $200-$400.

So yeah, I'm kinda stuck for awhile. The only thing I can do is count the days as by stories start to eat my brain. To Iruni: E-mail me what I did with chapter 6 anyway, I'll probably remember pieces and plans and explode with memories as I write.

However if I show my face often on any chat, it'll be because my Dad's not using the computer (Which is once in a solar eclipse). SO yeah, lets just hope I find a way to get something done.

Catch you later.

>>1783

I was thinking of the expanded warranty, then, which was probably expensive.

Don't you have a computer monitor or something that's free to use in your house? You could just plug up your laptop's external display adapter and run your laptop from there. That's what I used to do until I replaced the system.

>>1784
if I did do you think I'd be making such a fuss about this?

>>1794

Yes. After all, you just smashed your laptop screen; and whether you had an external monitor to continue using said laptop would have little effect on your feelings on said damage. However, I assume that by your statement, you do not have an external monitor, so... shit sucks. Sorry. :(

>>1797

indeed it does. Though if you know what kind of wire and plug I need, ththen by all means link me some info and prices and that can hold me over until we have enough moo-la to replace the screen. I'm not sure what plug on the side of the laptop is the external monitor plug, and the plugs are different from the one's I'm used to seeing. It's a 2006-2007, white, 13" macbook. So yeah, help doing research is appreciated.

>>1798
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mini_DisplayPort
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mini-DVI
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Micro-DVI

One of these, maybe? I don't know shit about macs and there doesn't seem to be information on wikipedia about the display-outs on macbooks prior to 2008.

I would imagine you need whatever that is -> vga or dvi.